Supreme Commander Movie: Chapter One

This is the first installment of a series of movies that I am planning on making. It is labeled as the fist chapter, but should really be thought of a trailer. This is my first movie, so please be easy on me.



Supreme Commander Movie: Chapter One



Feedback will be appreciated!|||I'm not going to sign up on a site to watch the video... plz put it on a public site that does not require registration.|||I agree with the above poster.|||Wait a sec... I didn't think that vimeo was private



EDIT: FIXED Sry, I had the video in private |||i want those 2 minutes back ( i know the video was longer but 2 minutes was all i coud stand)|||Before I reply, are you gonna be one of those people that get pissed off at people who critique your work?



Mike|||OrangeKnight|||Well, I guess we all have to start somewhere.|||boring and quite bad music|||VoW-Kryo|||If you were trying to keep the colors of the factions to what they usually are, why is Cybran blue and UEF red?|||Quote:|||Grim Tuesday|||This looks to be vanilla supcom, which would explain the harbingers lack of shields, and why he chose loyalists and titans instead of bricks and percies|||yes, it is vanilla. The reason that the units are not diverse is because all the videos were sitting on my hard drive taking up 8 GB of space, and I just wanted to make it, and delete about half of them.|||To be honest, the film was not fundamentally flawed, your intro was pretty epic. The trouble is you just didn't accomodate when it changed from OMGZ EPIX to OMGZ ACTION DEATH BLAM BLAM PEW PEW BOOM.|||Thanks. I will maybe release an edited version of it (new music, different parts)within a couple of days|||Grim Tuesday|||TonyCouchman!



ZOMG! That thread was epic.|||OrangeKnight|||Your story lacks plot. What you have shown us should be like chapter 7, after we know the characters, the plot, whats going on, what the purpose of the current battle is, and what the possible outcomes will mean for all involved. Also i wouldnt slow the battle down (except for epic parts/ parts appropiate to story) i would in general speed it up (just a tad) to create a fast action paced battle. And change the music.



The problem with your video is you just have a battle. Stories are about character. Character development, character conflict, how characters interact, thats what people watch movies for. You video is dubbed by others as poor because there is none of that. At a bare minimum you can name some of your soldiers and give them dialog and whatnot before the battle.



Good luck.|||Also imo, what orangeknight said, 1,3-5 really dont matter. They are good details, but a good story is a good story and those details wont make a good story or make a good one bad. They are more related to the quality of conveying the story and not the story itself.|||I didn't watch the whole thing, but I got to say that making videos is fun to do. After watching some of the video I did lose interest almost after 10 secs. This is a big experience for you as a first time machinima artist (lack of a better description). I know when I did my first video I took in lots of criticism or "information" as I like to call it, but after that I learned so many ways to improve and expand my experience into a great video to watch.



Roll with the punches and adapt to make a great video|||a tip: go on the wiki and look up how to use and enable the console (if you don't already know) and use the Ren_* commands to disable things like the mouse pointer and selection boxes for filming. this makes it appear more professional overall.
also, you know what that move screams to me?
MENU BACKGROUND!
remember the EPIC cybran vs UEF battle in the back of the old vanilla menu? this would be PERFECT as a replacement (sans music, of course) as it incorperates all three factions. add more unit diversity and standard colors, and Win=you.
an excellent first effort.|||mechanis